Front cover
Feedback:
Students have pointed out some bad and good points about my work.
Good points: Bright colors really liven up the image and the blue locker matches the blue text which looks quite interesting, rulers make the structure look neat, professional looking ,the cover image has a bright blue locker the same color as the blue text which makes the blue stand out, interesting promotion method, creative writing skills.
The leyton sixth form college at the top looks small and neat.
Bad points: model only fills up half the page which slightly ruins the magazine cover because about a third of the image is just the wall and ceiling which doesn’t make it look like a professional shot but a randomly taken picture.
Next time a more close up shot should be used.
What went well?
I took photographs for this task using a canon 12 megapixel camera, taking a variety of pictures placing my model in a college atmosphere (library, sports gym) I decided that a photo taken next to a college locker would be the best idea because such a simple idea can symbolize the enthusiasm of a student willing to learn, a locker associates with college work.
The photography was easy and quick; the flash made the picture look more professional because the color of the locker stands out, the light is reflected onto it causing the bottom of the locker to be a lighter shade of blue which gives it a glow.
I edited the contrast/brightness of the image, using the contrast to make it slightly darker but bring out the color and brightness to make it brighter.
The ayout of the page is accurate because of the rulers, all the text is carefully aligned.
For effect i wrote the ast head 'lsc times' in seperate fonts and different colours because it looks more lively and catchy.
All the text is either blue,yellow or white and only one part is red.
If i used more colours it will look unproffesional as if i was trying too hard to make it look good.
To catch the readers attention i wrote 'free coupon inside' this is so that the reader will purchase the magazine and the red colour is known to attract attention due to its obvious brightness.
As required i included a barcode, price and issue number.
Generally i think these just make it look more realistic, i chose my price to be 0.89p because its a decent price for students and a free magazine would seem like its only free because there is nothing good to pay for inside.
I think i was quite creative with the teasers and the coach joe teaser can appear amusing to some people. Its important to write teasers short but interesting because this is basicly what audience look at to determine whether it would satisfy them.
As students are into text messaging and emails i have included an @ instead of at to represent it as though it is targeted at young adults and will be interesting.
What do i need to improve on?
Alhough there it seems there is enough detail on there it still looks a bit empty if you look closely.
The model of the image doesnt take up enough space, it looks unprofessional because a big part of the cover is just the ceiling.
If i zoomed in enough for the ceiling to not be seen the model would be too close up.
There are some parts of the text where the end of the sentence is sticking out and ruins the whole
structure, i think something like this can ruin the layout.
Althought the masthead itself looks good I think it is too small because
the font couldn't get any bigger, i could have thought of another way to make a masthead.
The text on the right hand side can't be seen clearly because the font doesn't seem bold enough and
the bright blue locker slightly fades it out.
The fonts are all the same size which makes it look boring, also some fonts should be bigger than
others to show which articles are most important.
Three points for development
-Next time i will take more pictures so that can choose a suitable photo instead of one where irrelevent
parts
are seen.
- i will practise making a more bigger, professional masthead.
- include more detail, a variety of font sizes.
Contents
Feedback:
Good points: looks simple and neat, interesting contents, good choice of images because they all show lsc as a friendly and good college, contents match well with the teasers.
"fiesta latina" is a real event from the lsc website which would be a good way to advertise it to students.
Bad points: could have added more colour and detail, big gaps between text boxes (looks like something is missing), not own pictures used.
What went well? I chose a variety of pictures from the lsc website that portray lsc as a good college for e.g i chose the image of girls dancing because it shows students interest in extra curriclar activities, the bright picture at the bottom shows a beautiful view of the college.
I put these images together on indesign in seperate places to give space for the titles, i think
this made it look quite good.
The first image shows the lsc 'street' so it sort of looks like it is first bringing us into the atmosphere of the college and then showing the other parts of it.
The page layout looks plain but quite organized.
I made the page quite plain because i think contents should be easy to read without many colours.
Use of rulers made the text be carefully aligned with equal space around the perimeter.
The journalism was thought through because they all apply to the college not just random news that students would be interested in.
What do i need to improve on?
these aren't my photos which is a bad thing because it means half of my work isnt originally mine, the reason i didnt take no pictures for the contents is because i didnt realize i needed pictures for it until i started working on it.
I could have included slightly more detail in the contents page, maybe a few more teasers about lsc or a teachers speech.
The title doesn't have to be bigger but the fact that it has such a large empty space around it makes it look tiny, also the title could have been a different colour to make it appear brighter.
11 pages doesn't seem realistic so i should have maybe included more lsc events.
The teasers are the same as on the front cover and although this shows awareness of articles that are going to be written it also looks pointless because i could have just written the page numbers on the cover, these teasers should have been in black bold with a bit of detail underneath in a different colour.
I could have included teasers that would make the college seem very educational and interesting such as 'scientific experiment with a crocodile' or 'students build a mini rocket' so if someone outside of the college reads it, they will have a good impression of the college.
Three key points for development:
- I wont leave such massive gaps as this looks unprofessional as though it isnt finished
- Include more detail about the articles, otherwise they seem unimportant.
- make the subject of the magazine apply more to what is inside and at the same time interesting.
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